Peer Review Draft

Student_O’Brien Berry____________________                              English 1000C Essay Number_3_______

 

ESSAY COVERSHEET

 

Instructions: For each essay, complete a coversheet after you have written a discovery draft and then submit the coversheet with all subsequent drafts of the essay, revising the coversheet as needed if your approach to the essay changes.  You may write on the back of this sheet if you need more room.

 

1.         In a word or phrase, describe your topic. __Critique of Remember the Titans________________

 

2.         In a word or phrase, give your working title. ______Remembering the Titans__________________

 

3.         Complete the following sentence that tells why you are an insider on this subject; that is, what qualifies you to write on this subject.?

 

            I am an insider on this subject because

I feel like I have a personal attachment to the movie because I am from the same area that the movie took place, and I have friends who’s played for and against the team.

 

 

 

 

 

4.         In two to four sentences complete the following, which should describe your target audience in specific terms: class, gender, race, age, educational level, geographical location and the like.

 

            My target readers are

Those that have seen the movie and that have enjoyed the movie are my target audience. I feel that everyone likes to know the truth and even more about a subject when its presented in an appealing manner.

 

 

 

 

 

            I have chosen this specific audience because

I feel that I can relate to this audience best, because that’s the way I am when it comes to learning about new and intriguing topics.

 

5.         Complete the following statements that indicate (a) the purpose that you want to achieve in writing this essay for this specific audience and (b) the response you expect from this audience.        

 

            My purpose in writing this essay is to

Inform those that are reading what I have written that they writers of the movie did a great job of researching, and being historically accurate.

 

            I hope my audience will respond by

Appreciating the historical references and relevance in the movie.

 

6.         Complete the following sentence to indicate what value your essay holds for its readers.

 

            My readers will benefit from reading this essay by

Realizing that telling the entire story is important to being credible as well as earning respect.

 

7.         In a word or phrase, identify the role you are playing as the author of this essay:  Are you writing in your role as a university student, new parent, concerned citizen, dedicated worker, or what?

Movie critic

 

8.         In a complete sentence, state your thesis.  Be sure that this statement is the same thesis that appears in your essay.

Being historically accurate is important when gaining credibility, respect, as well as even maintaining interest.

 

Remember the Titans is the ultimate story of struggle and success. The movie is a non fictional story about the 1971 T.C. Williams football team. The movie also depicts how the community as well as the Titans football team struggled with the integration of the school, given the time period as well as the fact that a white store owner killed a young black male whom he suspected of stealing from his store. Denzel Washington plays Herman Boone, an African American football coach who was promoted to the head coaching position of the T.C. Williams football program. This promotion stirred up a lot of controversy, because Coach Boone was promoted over a hall of fame coach in Bill Yoast, played by Will Patton. When the news got out that coach Boone was an African American coach from North Carolina, who coached AA football as in comparison to AAA football, the community didn’t take a liking to him immediately, making the struggle for respect and equality that much harder.

 

Due to the fact that this movie non fictional, and set during a rough time in American history. The facts were accurate thus making the historical aspect of the movie accurate as well. I feel that if a movie, novel, and or even a news report based on an actual event doesn’t have their facts strait, the entire piece is not credible. Like giving a speech if the audience finds that the speaker is wrong about a particular aspect of their presentation, it makes it hard for them to believe the rest of their presentation. Being from the area in which the movie takes place, it’s easier for me to believe the events that were depicted in the movie, but for some one who is either from the north or the west might have trouble believing certain events that took place during the movie. An example of this would be after the Titans won a game and they were celebrating down the street with their teammate Ronnie Bass, also known as “Sunshine”, who happened to be from California. They were denied seating the restaurant because of the color of their skin. During that scene Petey tried to warn and or inform “Sunshine” that they weren’t wanted in that restaurant, and that racism is still relevant in that area as well a in that time period. “Sunshine” being from across the country in California didn’t realize that racism still took place even in that day and age.  This scene in the move does a great job of depicting history, and how it effect the lives of the characters, as well as show the time period that this movie was taking place.

 

Now, like I mentioned before about getting all of the facts is highly important, especially in a non-fictional piece. In Remember the Titans the directors and producers did in a way mislead the viewers into believing that Gerry Bertier’s football success all ceased after they won a game, and Gerry got into that dreadful accident, where he pulled out into an intersection unaware of the on coming traffic. In reality on that terrible night he was awarded the Defensive player of the year award, at their annual banquet dinner by his coaches and teammates. Unlike the movie, he was really on his way home from the banquet when his 1971 Camaro’s engine malfunctioned resulting in his paralyzing accident. This scene in the movie might have been altered for the purpose of keeping the story going, but my only question would be, why not portray the conflict in the movie exactly the way it happened in real life?

 

Another aspect of the movie that the audience might wonder would be how close are the characters in the movie, to the actual people that the actors were portraying. For the most part the actors did a great job in my opinion of depicting their real life counter parts in the movie. On the other hand some of the characters were created to help move the story along, similar to Gerry’s accident. For example the character Ray Budds, was Gerry’s selfish and racist best friend, who refused to block for his black teammate. In the movie his selfishness brought the team down as well as didn’t help them to succeed. Another example of a fictional character would be Allen Bosley the white defensive back, who gave up his spot for Petey Jones, to help them win the game. These two examples both show how dedicated and devoted to one another each of the Titans team members were. In the case of Allen he put his own pride and glory aside for the betterment of the team. Similar but different in its own way Gerry put aside his own friendship with Ray for the betterment of the team.

 

Remember the Titans an award winning film is a non fictional depiction of the 1971 T.C. Williams Titans football team. The movie does a great job of being historically correct with the events that occurred during the movie, as well as showing the unification of the team as well as the community with every win. Though the movie didn’t stay exactly on track, by portraying every aspect of the movie exactly as it happened in real life, it did do a great job of keeping the story going without giving away to the audience that they missed or changed something. In comparison to other non fictional representations of sports movies, I feel that Remember the Titans is the best because of the reasons I’ve mentioned in my critique of the movie.

 

 

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~ by 121hob on April 29, 2008.